The Gaming Den

Stahlseele wrote:saga of, not sage of.
i'll read the warhammer and this one tomorrow :P

he said and promptly forgot <.<

http://www.the-unpublishable.com/2014/0 ... ayers.html
"revered his grip" errr, close, but no cookie.
reversed i'd guess.

"Then the shieldwall would flesh"
i did not know a shieldwall could flesh, either i am once again no match for your linguistic skill or you typoed and meant flash.

two things in general:
is the shaving of the beard and making it into a weapon a thing in WHF or did you make that one up? because that's badass.


http://www.the-unpublishable.com/2014/0 ... aster.html
"save colored white instead of scarlet"
is that really gramatically correct? O.o

"lightclubs"
the hell?
how would that even work?
would that not simply be, by design and technology, a light sword with a wider blade?
because this is still laser/plasma right? so it will still melt/burn/cut through just about anything it hits correct?

"balding pate golden-skinned pate"
even without knowing what pate you mean, i think in this case one of them at least is wrong right?

can't find any other real errors in this one ^^

"save colored white instead of scarlet"
is that really gramatically correct? O.o

More or less, the understood meaning of "save" in this context is "except that it was."

Yeah, there's too many pates in that sentence.

Stahlseele wrote: two things in general:
is the shaving of the beard and making it into a weapon a thing in WHF or did you make that one up? because that's badass.

I made that one up.

"lightclubs"
the hell?
how would that even work?
would that not simply be, by design and technology, a light sword with a wider blade?
because this is still laser/plasma right? so it will still melt/burn/cut through just about anything it hits correct?

They're a thing in the expanded universe, and yes, they're regular lightsabers...except that the handle is big, sturdy, and heavy enough to beat someone to death with. Hence the name.

ah, i see, thank you for clearing that one up for me ^^

Too tired to write today, and so this is the third week of fanfiction. Fuck, I'm lazy. Anyway, in keeping with the Earthdawn OSSR I thought it appropriate to dig out "The Last Liferock" from retirement: http://www.the-unpublishable.com/2014/0 ... erock.html

I haven't been keeping this thread updated. Mostly because the writing is shit these days.

http://www.the-unpublishable.com/2014/08/prodigal.html

I'm currently trying to remember what the Sheriff's office looks like.

Too lazy to put this up yesterday: http://www.the-unpublishable.com/2014/0 ... edits.html

<sigh> Okay, so the cannibal vegetarian Aztec thing I was working on didn't work out, so here is yet another Star Wars fanfic starring Eiven Task: Duel at Uto Academy. If I ever do another one, I'm working in those Transformers/Star Wars crossover figures. Giant Force-fueled mecha battles.

"cannibal vegetarian"
wat.

Task emptied the rest of the clip into that group, which felt to the snowy ground, steam pouring from the flash-fried meat that used to be their legs.

fell, not felt.

The whole place felt alive, even empty as it was, the wind whipping through it with a steady moan that rose and felt in strange patterns.

fell not felt.

The seven walked carefully, ever step in synch, blades outward to face any threat and not endanger the others with an errant swing.

every not ever

The drugs didn't take the edge off the pain, but they let him ignore it and keep moving, which is what he needed right now.

No mixing tenses, bad bobby!

Fix'd. Yeah, I had this idea about sentient Aztec tomatoes...it didn't go where I thought it would go.

a bottle?

hmm?

tomatoes. cannibals . . blood . . ketchup . . bottle . .

I tried to focus on the General, who led the way, and the queer round scars at the back of her mostly-shaven head, but he moved quickly and the light was poor.

either her or she

As you might of guessed

no! no no no no NO! HAVE! DAMN IT BOBBY!

that the fucking Krauts and Frogs

OK, Krauts is us germans . . who's Frogs?

they were looking to contact previous incarnations of the Dalai Lama so the state could contact and declare and control the next one

Heh, Den current ^^

effervescence

are you making up words again? <.<

Stahlseele wrote:

that the fucking Krauts and Frogs

OK, Krauts is us germans . . who's Frogs?

The French.

effervescence

are you making up words again? <.<

Nope.

Lazy day, just posting some of my old doodles. I stopped myself before I got to any of the ideas at play during the old Crypts of Chaos game.

http://www.the-unpublishable.com/2015/0 ... ons-1.html